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Nou, dit is wat ik er van heb kunnen maken . Moest het in 't Engels schrijven Hoop dat 't wat is:
Heather was doing her homework. It had to be finished tomorrow. It was late. She was making a assignment for literature. It was a boring essay. She looked on her watch. Half past eleven. She was bored and didn’t want to finish it. But she had to hand it in tomorrow. She needed some distraction so she went downstairs to get something to drink and a sandwich. She putted the light on in the kitchen. Her dog jumped to her, happy to see her. She petted him and got a glass of ice tea. She also got a sultana, her favourite snack. She took the glass and snack with her upstairs. The dog followed her. She ate her snack and drank her ice tea. Her dog putted something on her leg. It was a four month old dogtreet with mould on it. She threw in it a bin. Then she continued her work. Then suddenly the computer screen turned black. A few seconds later her light didn’t work. By feeling she went downstairs. She ordered her dog to stay on her room. She managed to pick up her cell phone and used it’s light to see things. Her parents were still asleep, she thought. She tried to find out what was wrong. She tried everything but it didn’t work. After she sat down for a minute she heard a door slam. She listened. Then she heard something bounce like a football. She went upstairs. She looked at her room and her dog was gone. She got scared. Then she heard breaking glass. It came from her parents room. She checked. Her parents were gone. She jelled for them but no reaction. Then she jelled. Someone was trying to unlock the front door. She knew that there was something completely wring. What was happening? Where were her parents and her dog? As silent as possible she went downstairs. But she fell over a dog toy. Them she saw a huge shadow through the windows of the front door. He started to yell. Open the goddamned door or I will cut you into pieces and eat you like a juicy piece of beef’’. Her body froze, she couldn’t say anything. Then she woke up, bathing in her own sweat. She was lying with her head on her books in a weird way. She had a sore neck. She looked around. Her dog laid in front of her desk. It was all a dream.
Omdat ik graag wat doe met opbouwende kritiek heb ik 't ff veranderd
Heather was doing her homework. It had to be finished tomorrow. It was late. She was making a assignment for literature. It was a boring essay. She looked on her watch. Half past eleven. She was bored and didn’t want to finish it. But she had to hand it in tomorrow. She needed some distraction so she went downstairs to get something to drink and a sandwich. She putted the light on in the kitchen. Her dog jumped to her, happy to see her. She petted him and got a glass of ice tea. She also got a sultana, her favourite snack. She took the glass and snack with her upstairs. The dog followed her. She ate her snack and drank her ice tea. Her dog putted something on her leg. It was a four month old dogtreet with mould on it. She threw in it a bin. Then she continued her work. Then suddenly the computer screen turned black. A few seconds later her light didn’t work. By feeling she went downstairs. She ordered her dog to stay on her room. She managed to pick up her cell phone and used it’s light to see things. Her parents were still asleep, she thought. She tried to find out what was wrong. She tried everything but it didn’t work. After she sat down for a minute she heard a door slam. She listened. Then she heard something bounce like a football. She went upstairs. She looked at her room and her dog was gone. She got scared. Then she heard breaking glass. It came from her parents room. She checked. Her parents were gone. She jelled for them but no reaction. Then she jelled. Someone was trying to unlock the front door. She knew that there was something completely wring. What was happening? Where were her parents and her dog? As silent as possible she went downstairs. But she fell over a dog toy. Them she saw a huge shadow through the windows of the front door. He started to yell. Open the goddamned door or I will cut you into pieces and eat you like a juicy piece of beef’’. Her body froze, she couldn’t say anything. Then she woke up, bathing in her own sweat. She was lying with her head on her books in a weird way. She had a sore neck. She looked around. Her dog laid in front of her desk. It was all a dream.
Omdat ik graag wat doe met opbouwende kritiek heb ik 't ff veranderd
21 okt 2007 - bewerkt op 22 okt 2007
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Malissa*
maandag 22 oktober 2007 00:08
misschien is het leuk als je/het meisje niet wakker word in bed, maar met haar hoofd op het toetsenbord of dr boeken, want ze was toch huiswerk aant maken.. dan betrek je het een beetje bij elkaar
Maybe vind je t niks, maar moet je natuurlijk zelf kijken...
Maar zeker een goed verhaal geworden
XxMalisS -
''esta!''
maandag 22 oktober 2007 00:09
thanks
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EVE™ (opgeheven op 11-1-2011)
maandag 22 oktober 2007 00:25
like the story, still its hard to concentrate with all the very short scentences!
bút i do like the story.
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